The Witch’s Revenge is written by Danny Odato and is his
debut novel. It features around an
Indian village that becomes plagued by unexplainable accidents and deaths.
Let’s talk about the good parts first. The base story of a girl out for revenge who
learns dark craft is intriguing, and the village has likeable enough
characters. There is great potential in
this story and it was different enough from other common topics that it was
enjoyable. It was apparent that Danny
Odato took the time to understand certain close-knit aspects of a small Indian
community.
This was easily identifiable as a debut novel by one main
feature: editing, or lack thereof. My
first problem with this book arose from the cover photo. There is a young woman in black that is very
obviously not of Indian descent. This
struck me as unfitting, when so much of the book is featured around the
importance of a traditional Indian village.
With so much focus on tradition, it seemed weird that there were a
couple of Christian references to God from a traditional sense that would be
focused more on a specific God and not just “God” in general, in Hindu
belief.
Danny Odato uses a multitude of Indian words, but offers no
glossary and a lack of any explanation within the book for many of the
words. As a reader you are forced to try
to take the context around the word to try to translate what he was meaning,
and in some cases, you are left with a guess that is never confirmed, even
after completion of the book.
My number one complaint about this book; apart from the editing
in general, would be a complete lack of descriptions. I have no idea what anyone or anything in
this book actually looks like. I find it
ignorant to just assume that “everyone looks like a traditional Indian”. That could mean so many different things
depending on the section of India that they are in. The most description we get is about minute
details, such as eyes gouged out or the beads of the witch. Also the description of a persona was
missing. Instead of describing a
character in a way that the reader can feel their emotions, the emotions are
given repeatedly with no real descriptions, such as might saying someone walked
depressingly and spoke depressingly. I wanted
to yell: “Quit telling me and show me”.
Overall I give this book 2/5 stars. I give Danny Odato props for putting himself
out there and getting a book onto paper which is more than a lot of people have
accomplished. However, with that being
said, you would think that he would have had some people look it over and edit
it for me. There was a complete 3 page
section at the end of a chapter that was exactly repeated a few chapters
later. With some editing and possibly a
descriptive writing workshop, I think that this story could blossom into
something that would make a more enjoyable read. It caters to a lover of witchcraft, India,
fiction, mystery, etc.
*I received this book for free in exchange for a fair and
honest review.
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