I received this book for free in exchange for an honest review.
I hate to say that this is one of the worst books I have read in a long
time. The description had me very interested and I liked the cover
artwork as well. This is not a purely negative review, but a really
disappointed reader review.
The Fire Within is written by Racquel
Kechagias. It is a Paranormal/Fantasy/Young Adult Novel. It deals
with Vampires and Skinwalkers, as well as Shapeshifters and a plethora
of other creatures. The beginning started out well, with the main
Vampire Victor and his sharing of his soul in the hopes of finding a
future wife…. A wonderful story set up.
Fast forward to the
girl being born named Anna… And everything really goes downhill. She
was an ok character, but seemed to be fairly one-dimensional until
towards the end of the story when she finally gets a backbone. Victor
was likeable in the beginning and then his personality really fades out
in the story. Christian and Kayden seemed to have the most personality
of all of the characters.
This book felt like the wonderful outline
of an epic story. But there were so many things missing that as it
stands, it just can’t deliver. Racquel has the breadth of vision, but
really needs help in presentation of her idea. I can commend her for
her original ideas in that this was not just another vampire novel. Her
vision of the skinwalkers was terrifyingly fascinating. The “Fire
Within” was a very unique view of a power (I won’t give it away).
with all of that being said, the book was seriously lacking in
description. There were very few descriptions about scenery and people
and clothing, and just the overall environment of the story. The only
parts of the story that seemed to contain any description were in the
dreams. Although there was no specific time period set for this story,
it gave the impression that it was definitely behind modern times, given
the castles and travel by horseback… So if that is true, than I was
thrown off by so many time changing words thrown in that seemed out of
place. For example, Anna’s horse is name Latte, the lingo was very
modern in phrases such as “so to speak.” There are multiple mentions of
clocks, which would not have existed, and the religion talk speaks more
of a Christian God that seemed highly out of place given the rest of
the story. On top of all of this, the grammar and typo issues made it
hard to push through to the end. I was getting very frustrated with
the seeming lack of understanding of certain English words such as motif
being used instead of motive. Learnt being used in place of learned.
And then quite constantly used when the word quiet would have made more
sense. Once I did finally make it to the end, in my exasperation to
finish the story… there was all this buildup to a fizzle ending.
to say this was a hard story to get through. I think that if given the
wonderful original ideas that Racquel has that this could become a
really great story, it is still a long way from that. If The Fire
Within was to have a proper editor go through this a lot of these issues
could be alleviated. Add in the descriptors, paint your world for the
rest of us to see if the way you have envisioned it in your mind. Fix
the grammar and typos so as not to distract from the story. Add in more
dimensional characters, tell us as the readers more about these
characters so we can know them as they are known to you. That would
make for a wonderful and enjoyable read. As it stands, I can’t give
this book more than 2 out of 5 stars… I give it 2 for potential and for